Antigone Cadmus

I think it would be nice if you added description. I believe when you reviewed my piece, you told me to show not tell. You need to do the same. ...

Hey, Ducati! “Asha, Oh my God, this party is the best party I’ve ever been too . It’s crazy!” A few grammar issues here. 1. Don't capitalize "oh". 2. Incorrect ...

This is a pretty good start. Rose and Scorpius? Ech. Is this going into some Romeo and Juliet thingy? The summer, it transpired was not the blast she had envisioned. ...

Wow. This is really good. You're style of writing is gorgeous. Just a few little things to critique: I felt thrilled. Rejuvenated. Weak. Powerful. I really like this line, but ...

*gasp* Twilight Princess! I love that game! The Zelda games are pure awesomeness!!! *high fives Incognito Temptation* Anyway... on with the review! Wow. You're a really good artist. I agree ...

Your beginning is fine. It's just a little bland. Like I said, describe the laughter more. How does your character laugh? Why is he laughing? Why does the horse approve ...

As promised! I laughed. Once again, your story starts out with a boring sentence. Like I told you last time, anybody can laugh. How does your character laugh? What makes ...

Ah. So there is a whole article. :) Critique: It seems to me Maybe it's just my personal opinion, but this is waaaaaay to casual for a beginning. At least ...

I'm not sure how to review abstract art, ha. I like the second painting better.The colors pop more. There is more contrast and the blue is prettyful. The first one ...

This is a good start. Is this just the introduction? If it is, post the rest. If it is the whole article, it needs a lot of work. You never ...

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Um, thanks for sharing? Last paragraph seems kind of TMI... maybe you should up the rating to "R". o.O. I didn't know this was about your sex life. o.O The ...

Excellent. Short yet very good. I agree, the first line is a bit too short. Also, get a bit more into the suicide theme. If you hadn't mentioned it was ...

This is cute. I agree that it does need a better meter, but I like it. I drew a smiley on my knee, because life needed happier things. My knee ...

This is a great poem. Critique: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I walk this road, I walk this road. Alone in travels, travels. The light does not show,